...HOW DID I NOT SEE THIS BEFORE?! So, like, I was jus' goin' through some of the older prose, and randomly (that's how I roll), I decided to read this...
What you have here, Luv, is a little piece of epic. In fact, it'd be totally cool if you wrote a sequel (even though this is supposed to be a short story, aha...). Well, the thought process doesn't flow as well as it could, so if that isn't intentional (I've done that before for mentally unstable characters...), try connecting the different thoughts more cohesively. The descriptions are very nice, though, particularly when you describe the room they enter. Was that a hint of sarcasm at the end there, or is that just me...?
The grammar is overall good, though, "I turn to him and he's talking through clenched teeth," would (to me) sound better if there were a few more words in there. Like, "I turn to face him, and see that he's talking through clenched teeth." O'course, I'm not very good at writing in present tense myself (kudos to you for writing it so masterfully!), so that could be totally wrong.
Oh, and there's a typo later on. "I turn my head and OUR noses hit-gently." XD It was "out"...A comma before "but" in "...all of it is fun and easy around him, but I never wanted marriage." Independent clauses and such. D; That stuff is so tiresome.
I love this plot. It has such potential for all kinds of drama and fun...Let's face it, royal families have got all kinds of angsty turmoil going on~! Oooo, the more I look at it, the spicier it gets! XD Totally brill, Luv.
~Tobi~