The Legend: Prolougue

The Legend
By: Wind

Prologue
Life…. is the greatest honor to have out in these lands. Here, it is cruel. We are in constant battle. Danger waits with every step. It wasn’t always like this, though. This used to be a peaceful place, but over the years, new predators have found our land and plan to take it as their own. Those animals are the cave lion, saber-toothed tiger, and giant short-faced bear. We also compete for territory, with opposing packs. Now this land is stained with blood, bodies, and war. We fight to survive now. Those not strong enough will join my fallen brethren. I am Agrim, it means Leader or first. I am alpha of “The Pack of the High Hills”. I have lost my mother, father, and my only son. My mate is cruelly ill; Asha says she won’t stay to see the end of this chaos. I just hope the legend is true. “The time of great blood shed and increase of the fallen, there will come a wolf that will bring peace back to the land. But they will stand with another. One who is trusted and yet is not”.

Okay, I found a couple of things here.

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Life…. is the greatest honor to have out in these lands.

It should say --> Life... It's the greatest honor to have out in these lands.

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I am alpha of “The Pack of the High Hills"

The quotation marks can be eliminated, and the name just be capitalized.

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I am Agrim, it means Leader or first.

Might I suggest Agrim, meaning leader or first? Leader doesn't need to be capitalized.

Otherwise, pretty good. I look forward to more!

Cheez

Enticing story line and makes you want to read more. You definitely have some talent sprouting there. Other than those minor mistakes I love it!

Quote: But they will stand with another. One who is trusted and yet is not.

I guess those are my two favorite sentences, though the last three are very good as well. Awesome job wind! I don't think there are any grammer mistakes this time either. Keep going! I want more. More!