NikkiSwift Honorable Writer
Posts : 225 WL Points : 29164 Join date : 2010-05-14 Age : 26 Location : Camp Half Blood ♥
| Subject: "Why (Y)" Mon May 24, 2010 10:25 pm | |
| Look down that hall, Did you see anything at all? Did you see me? Or did you just turn and look away?
If I had a chance To tell you about this I would say one thing I could be your anything
I wish you could see What you are And what you mean What you mean to me
Your one plus a million, No, one plus a billion Then again you turn away One and a trillion chances, That you'll notice me
Everything to me is new But to you Your sky is your very own kind of blue One in a million chances I would say 'One plus a million' 'Equals you'
If I could say want I wanna say I'd say I would blow you away Away with me On my journey To prove myself worthy Of your love
Lay in bed Stars are lined in the night sky As I think to myself Why? Would you tell anyone If I were to die Die for you?
As you walk by I let out a cry One of heartbreak And one of a lie I turn my head away And I say in a whisper 'Those things I'd never say' 'Will be forever myster-' 'Y'
~I felt this while I was watching the stars on our balcony. It just came suddenly. I hope you like it. Nikki
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Luv2Type Instructor
Posts : 402 WL Points : 32659 Join date : 2010-02-22 Age : 27 Location : Atlanta, Geogria
| Subject: Re: "Why (Y)" Tue May 25, 2010 5:27 pm | |
| Girl, you HOPE? Who wouldn't like this poem? Love, wanting, heartbreak. Deepness. Thought. Care. Love. A true wanting. Expression. Seeable. Those things are in the poem. Thats what you put in. Its deep. It has thought. Full of care when they feel invisible. Love for the other. Love for the poem. A true wanting for something she probably won't have. Expression in how you might love someone or something. You can see it in your mind. Every scene. You're amazing! Dang girl, you were born a poet. Keep writing this good and you'll be a child poet (or author or both). | |
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NikkiSwift Honorable Writer
Posts : 225 WL Points : 29164 Join date : 2010-05-14 Age : 26 Location : Camp Half Blood ♥
| Subject: Yay!!!!! Tue May 25, 2010 5:32 pm | |
| Aww!! I'm so thrilled you love it! I Luv poetry. It's amazing and can be so easy and quick to write at the same time! Glad to hear your opinion!! ~ A Very Excited Nikki | |
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