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PostSubject: Advice to the Wiser   Thu Jul 14, 2011 12:34 am

Don't focus on things
you cannot change,
or give up
when the times are down,

Try not dwell on
past convictions,
be open
to somethings new

Open your heart to
new found heartache
never be
afraid to feel

Never ever let
someones issue
point you to
an iron heart
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PostSubject: Re: Advice to the Wiser   Mon Jul 18, 2011 1:37 pm

I like this. It was very well written, with no overly obnoxious rhyming, but with just enough to make it tasteful. Your poem speaks the truth, about perserverance, hope, acceptance, and love. Even though those things are different, you brought them together with some lovely, simple words. What was your inspiration? They often come from the starngest places but can have such an affect it's crazy. I hope that you can continue to write such wonderful, mature, beautiful things.
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