Where you wander around, review, and post your literary works!
 
HomeRegisterLog in

Share | 
 

 Thunder is......

View previous topic View next topic Go down 
AuthorMessage
Arrow
Instructor
Instructor
avatar

Posts : 122
WL Points : 16708
Join date : 2010-02-22
Age : 20
Location : Stalking my next prey >:)

PostSubject: Thunder is......   Mon Jul 12, 2010 4:24 pm

Thunder is......

The deep rumbling roar of the lion
The satisfying crakle of popcorn
The gurgling purr of my kitty
The brother of lightning
The father of fire
The great divider of clouds in the sky
That is thunder
That is sky
So who is storm
And who am I

Back to top Go down
http://www. Elcheart.darkbb.com
Luv2Type
Instructor
Instructor
avatar

Posts : 402
WL Points : 19879
Join date : 2010-02-22
Age : 20
Location : Atlanta, Geogria

PostSubject: Re: Thunder is......   Thu Jul 22, 2010 6:34 pm

Well, I like the not ryhming part. So many poems rhyme these days that it's nice to see some that don't (though I perfer to have my poems rhyme). The two rhyming lines at the end aren't bad either. And I like the way you describe thunder as a good thing-and as a bad one. Unique. Very unique.
Love ya,
Luv
Back to top Go down
 
Thunder is......
View previous topic View next topic Back to top 
Page 1 of 1
 Similar topics
-
» Thunder King Rai oh vs. Gorz
» Gemini Spark and Thunder King Rai-Oh
» Gerard Butler, Sam Worthington, Matthew McConaughey Team for Iraq War Pic 'Thunder Run'
» Thunder Run - filming in Baton Rouge May 1-July 15, 2012
» Lakers / Thunder game - April 22

Permissions in this forum:You cannot reply to topics in this forum
Wonderland :: Literary :: Poetry-
Jump to: