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PostSubject: Thunder is......   Mon Jul 12, 2010 4:24 pm

Thunder is......

The deep rumbling roar of the lion
The satisfying crakle of popcorn
The gurgling purr of my kitty
The brother of lightning
The father of fire
The great divider of clouds in the sky
That is thunder
That is sky
So who is storm
And who am I

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PostSubject: Re: Thunder is......   Thu Jul 22, 2010 6:34 pm

Well, I like the not ryhming part. So many poems rhyme these days that it's nice to see some that don't (though I perfer to have my poems rhyme). The two rhyming lines at the end aren't bad either. And I like the way you describe thunder as a good thing-and as a bad one. Unique. Very unique.
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