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grace1096
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PostSubject: Come Out On Top   Tue Feb 23, 2010 9:25 pm

(Yes, I know it is rather dark, but can you guess what it is about?)

Am I the only one?
Do you see it too?
The lies, secrets, hate
They float
like balloons
always
destined
to
pop.

Can you feel it in the air?
Do you hear it coming?
The hope, disappointment, tears
It crashes
like a tidal wave
always
leaving
a
mess.

Rarely cleaned up,
the lies, secrets, hate,
hope, disappointment, tears
Though many have survived,
who will come out on top?
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PostSubject: Re: Come Out On Top   Thu Feb 25, 2010 10:14 pm

Very expressive. I like the way you shaped it too. I don't really get it, but it's AMAZING. You're not trying too hard to rythme and in areas it does and in some parts it doesn't. Very nice mix. I like it a lot, peotry is your thing! I love you
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