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NikkiSwift
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PostSubject: I Don't Wanna Go There Anymore   Mon May 17, 2010 8:45 pm

Member down by the creek
Just you and me
Splashed each other
In our plain ole Ts.

But I member those stairs
That we sat on
Just you and me
And you got down on one knee
And said
'Marry me today'
'Before you wish your life away.'

Flowers in my hair
Petals everywhere
You looked in my eyes
Told me that you'll me
Forever mine
But now I
Am not so sure of that.

Now I sit down
Down by that creek
I think about
What when wrong
Wrong with me

I should have waited longer
I wasn't ready
Ready for love
Or this family

I could go back
To every laugh
But I don't wanna go there anymore.

But I rethink those steps
And those words
That you said
But whats next?
I don't wanna think about this anymore.

I take off that ring
Given to me in the spring
By that liar
Who never really loved me
And I threw it in the fire
And burn it to smithereens.

I don't wanna think
I don't wanna touch
I don't wanna go there
Anymore. ~Nikki


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PostSubject: Re: I Don't Wanna Go There Anymore   Mon May 24, 2010 5:32 pm

Awesome! I love it! I mean, awesome, cool, incrediable. I like the romance, the heart break, the unhappily ever after. More like it! Maybe from her daughters point of view. . . if she has a daughter. But I like it. More like it! More! (please *cute smile and baby eyes*)
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PostSubject: Aww thanks!   Mon May 24, 2010 10:07 pm

Aw... I didn't know that you liked so much! I was wondering 'bout about putting this through her ex-husband's view, and how he cheated and how he well, you know. But ya! I love the daughter's point of view! Totally somethin' to think 'bout! *Jumps up and down as if about to meet Taylor Swift*
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PostSubject: Re: I Don't Wanna Go There Anymore   Tue May 25, 2010 5:30 pm

Good idea about the ex-husbands view too! Maybe. . . he cheated first. And she found out. So 1) She cheats back to make him feel bad/for revenge/to teach him a lesson. 2) She confronts him and he doesn't say sorry/she starts to file for a divorce/ they talk and decide together on divorce.
But hey, those are just suggestions. I'm sure whatever you write will be good. Smile I love you
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